Not vey often we get the opportunity to experience a script here. Okay… let’s be honest. This is the first for Ramblings of an Amateur Writer. Today we get to pop our script cherry with Vanessa Morgan’s a Good Man! I feel like I should be blushing, but thanks to my skin coloration I have the perfect camoflauge. 😉 Without further ado, I present you Vanessa Morgan and her latest release A Good Man.
Louis Caron is a good man – vegetarian, he feeds the homeless, takes care of animals and is concerned with the ecological future of the planet. But his altruism has a sinister edge – he’s a vampire – and local detective Taglioni is becoming increasingly suspicious. Louis’ attempt to escape the police will take him on a journey into his own private hell where he is not only forced to confront his worst fears, but also to destroy the lives of those he cares about most.
Guest post by Vanessa Morgan
I often get the question if I base my characters on real people. Normally, that’s not the case, but I made an exception for A Good Man. The steamy scene that I’m going to share with you below is a good example of that. When I was writing the first draft of A Good Man, one of my friends told me about a one-night stand with a lady called Butterfly. When he told me how they ended up in bed less than half an hour after they had met, I just knew I had to incorporate this scene into A Good Man. It has gotten me the bad reputation of the girl that asks too many details about her friends’ sex life, but looking at the scene now, I’m sure it was worth it. Only two facts in this scene are invented: Butterfly didn’t get killed and she didn’t have a cat (that was just a sneaky excuse to talk about my cat Avalon, who you might know from his web comic at http://avalon-lion.blogspot.com.
A Good Man is now being turned into a feature film. Who would you cast as Louis and Butterfly?
Excerpt of A Good Man (screenplay)
INT. LOUIS’ BATHROOM – EVENING
Louis takes a shower. He comes out, dries himself and
puts a towel around his body. He takes an organic
facial cream and rubs it on his face. He then puts on
some organic after shave.
INT. BAR – LATER
Louis sits at the bar. BUTTERFLY (46 years old),
fully tatooed and unkept, takes a seat next to him.
Hi, I’m Butterfly. I believe we met on
My cat must have known I was seeing a man
tonight. He had a nervous breakdown just
before I left… So weird.
What breed is your cat?
A Turkish Van cat. It’s a very rare breed.
Ah, the swimming cat! Beautiful animal.
You know Turkish Van cats?! You’re
Reason enough to kiss Louis languorously. Louis is
somewhat surprised, but returns the kiss.
INT. LOUIS’ APARTEMENT BUILDING, STAIRCASE – LATER
Louis and Butterfly enter Louis’ apartment building
and go up the staircase. Butterfly doesn’t stop
talking about her cat, which is rather annoying to
I’m crazy about my cat. I love him so much.
He’s like my child. I can’t imagine that
Avalon would be alone or unhappy someday.
Did I tell you that I only buy him organic
food? He eats better than I do —
Louis unlocks the door.
INT. LOUIS’ HALLWAY
Louis and Butterfly enter the apartment. Louis
switches on the lights.
That’s a very nice apartment you have here.
I bet Avalon would love it too, especially
the sofa… To sharpen his claws, you know
what I mean? He has three climbing trees,
but he prefers —
Louis kisses Butterfly hungrily (in order to make her
shut up). She kisses him back. Louis undresses her.
When undressed, Butterfly frees herself from his
grip, goes toward the sofa in the living room and
gets on her knees. A large tatoo of a butterfly is
visible on her lower back.
Take me like this.
Louis jumps on her like a wild beast.
Louis and Butterfly in the throes of sex, moaning
After sex, Louis rolls off her and sits down on the
edge, still panting. Butterfly stretches onto the
sofa. She caresses his belly.
Don’t touch my belly.
Why? My cat Avalon has a big belly as well.
You shouldn’t —
Even before Butterfly is able to finish her sentence,
Louis bites her in the neck. Butterfly’s life passes
rapidly before Louis’ eyes – exotic holidays, drugs,
sex, more sex. People and places are never the same.
Exciting adventures intertwine with moments of
extreme solitude. Louis pulls back. Butterfly tries
to staunch the wound with her hands, but she’s too
weak and she has trouble breathing. Louis bites
again. A flash of Butterfly doing drugs and losing
herself in nirvana. Butterfly dies while Louis is
still sucking her blood. The sofa saturates with
blood. Louis runs to the toilet to vomit.
INT. LOUIS’ LIVING ROOM – LATER
Louis goes through Butterfly’s handbag. He takes her
keys, looks at her ID and reads her address out loud.
INT. BUTTERFLY’S STUDIO APARTMENT, STAIRCASE – LATER
Louis, wearing latex gloves, opens the door to
Butterfly’s studio apartment.
INT. BUTTERFLY’S STUDIO APARTMENT
Louis enters Butterfly’s studio apartment. His hands
search for the light switch. He finds it and switches
(calling the cat)
Avalon? Kitty? Where are you?
Avalon jumps from the kitchen counter and walks
toward Louis, headbutting him. Louis takes the cat in
Come with me, Avalon.
EXT. LOUIS’ APARTMENT BUILDING – LATER
Louis leaves the car with a pet caddy. He unlocks the
door to his apartment building and enters.
INT. LOUIS’ LIVING ROOM – LATER
Avalon eats from his tray. He is surrounded by dozens
of toys. Louis caresses him.
(talking to the cat)
I will take good care of you, Avalon. I’m
your new Butterfly. You see, I’m a good
Behind Louis, the sofa is still covered with blood.
About Vanessa Morgan
Screenwriter and novelist Vanessa Morgan is known as the ‘female version of Stephen King’. You can find out more about Vanessa Morgan and her work by going to her personal blog http://vanessa-morgan.blogspot.com. If you like cats, you might also like the web comic about her cat Avalon at http://avalon-lion.blogspot.com.
Other books by Vanessa Morgan
Drowned Sorrow (novel)
Megan Blackwood has just lost her son in a terrible accident. Now she has come to Moonlight Creek with her teenage daughter Jenna, hoping that a change of scenery might help to put her life back together. But something odd is going on in Moonlight Creek. When rain falls over the village, the inhabitants commit grisly murders, leaving the village deserted with the first rays of sunshine. Beneath the lake’s surface, an eerie presence watches… and waits… Waits to reveal a tragic past drowned in mystery and fear. One that doesn’t bode well for visitors. By the time Megan realizes that her daughter is in danger, it might already be too late.
The Strangers Outside (short story)
Two sisters, Jennifer and Louise, return to their remote holiday cottage after a day at the seaside. But little do they know they’re being surrounded. Soon after their arrival, the girls will come face to face with the strangers outside. When the assailants make their intentions known, things take a shockingly terrible turn and an intense battle for survival will begin.